Your comments here are why I raised the question of "But what is the voice?" in my reply back at sartorias's. You dislike my rewrite because it's not solidly inside a POV, but the original isn't solidly inside a POV either, and the two first sentences sartorias gave of the story she's reading show no indication of a POV at all.
Do you only read fiction written from a strong interior POV? If so, you're missing out on a lot of great literature.
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Date: 2009-05-21 07:54 pm (UTC)Do you only read fiction written from a strong interior POV? If so, you're missing out on a lot of great literature.