I don't think it was your rewrite specifically, which was very methodical; more that I just don't have any problem with the clarity, or level of detail, of the original.
I do enjoy Westlake, although it's pacy plots and comic timing that leap to memory rather than clarity -- which doesn't, obviously, mean that he is unclear.
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Date: 2007-09-25 02:40 pm (UTC)I do enjoy Westlake, although it's pacy plots and comic timing that leap to memory rather than clarity -- which doesn't, obviously, mean that he is unclear.