Fair enough, which is why, when commenting on sartorias's example, I kept pointing out that this was only two sentences. And it was not, in any case, as clear an example of the problem as this one was, which is why I linked to this one.

Agree that my sentence is ploddy. This is why I don't write fiction! Its only function is to convey the orienting material that would avoid tripping readers over cobblestones.